Invisible Man I and II

Invisible Man: Original Version

Quiet, invisible man waits

Dark, silent night creeps

Large, old clock chimes.

Quiet, invisible man stands.

Big, wooden door creaks.

Night air is warm.

Invisible, quiet man walks.

Black, square payphone sits.

Invisible, quiet man stops.

Bright, little key turns.

Shiny, silver coins clang.

Brown, cloth bags bulges.

Brown bag is heavy.

Strong, invisible man grunts.

Quiet, invisible man runs.

Big, wooden door opens.

Brown, cloth bag drops

Soft, warm bed groans.

Quiet, invisible man sleeps.

Looking back, I am thankful my teacher didn’t take off points because I used several of the adjectives more than once. And recounting now after 10 years, I’ve noticed I only wrote 19 lines. Whoops… 

I edited it a bit.

Invisible Man: The Thesaurus Edition

Quiet, invisible man waits.

Dark, long night creeps.

Large, old clock chimes.

Silent, unseen man stands.

Big, wooden door creaks.

Night air is warm.

Imperceptible, soundless man walks.

Black, square payphone sits.

Indiscernible, inaudible man stops.

Bright, little key turns.

Shiny, silver coins clang.

Brown, cloth bags bulges.

Canvas bag is heavy.

Strong, unobservable man grunts.

Stealthy, covert man runs.

Large, carved door opens.

Brown, cloth bag drops.

Soft, warm bed groans.

Exhausted working man sleeps.

Hot, yellow ball rises.